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Student Essay Example: Person of Influence

[fa icon="calendar'] Oct 21, 2016 2:55:07 PM / by Story2 Guest Author posted in High School and College, Community

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This blog is part of a series featuring supplemental college admission essays written and approved for publication by Story2 students. This essay by Ricardo, a graduate from NYU, was chosen because of its authentic dialogue, and use of the Story2 Moments Method, which emphasizes focusing on a specific moment, and the action taken by students to reflect a value and characteristic that’s unique and authentic.


By Ricardo, NYU ‘16

Prompt: Indicate a person who has had a significant influence on you, and describe that influence.

Covering his ears while walking past the Central Park carousel, Daniel began to hum a tune that greatly overwhelmed the carousel’s music. People walking down the street gave Daniel a second glance as he was running past the carousel. Daniel is my little brother. He is 10 years old and is diagnosed with Asperger’s. He typically watches the TV in our living room, but on any other TV, he covers his ears and hums a tune as if he is listening to a screeching melody that nobody else can hear. Daniel often sticks to me like a magnet, trying to figure out what I am doing. One minute I am alone in my room, doing my art homework, and the next minute I can feel Daniel’s breath on my back, and see his eyes absorbing the environment of my room. I put on Cartoon Network and whispered to myself, “I wish he would leave me alone.”

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How to Write Your “Why This College” Supplement Essay

[fa icon="calendar'] Oct 20, 2016 1:29:59 PM / by Story2 Guest Author posted in High School and College

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For high school seniors, applying to college can feel like an entirely new experience. It requires students to think critically about who they are and where they’re headed, perhaps for the first time in their life. Until then, going to college might be a very abstract idea, and students may be making decisions based on very little actual research.

As a College Coach with College Summit, I always ask Peer Leaders and other students I work with to share their college lists before I make other suggestions. I want to hear their reasons for thinking about each of the colleges. Typically, they say “It’s close to home”; “My friends are applying there”; “It has a high ranking”; or “I can’t afford anywhere else.” I reply, “Think of the college’s point of view. Why should they take you? How will you contribute to the campus? Are you going to be a typical student for them?” As you begin to think more specifically, your list will become more specific to your needs. Most of my students have realized that there may be a range of colleges they can afford, and that there may well be opportunities beyond what they have dreamed of. If students understand the process, they can embark on applications with confidence!

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Overcoming Adversity: Answering Greenlight Scholars Essay 4

[fa icon="calendar'] Oct 19, 2016 2:46:47 PM / by Tyler Nakatsu posted in High School and College

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College-Greenlight-Essays-Story2.jpgDiscuss a situation in which you overcame an obstacle, setback or self-doubt. What enabled you to succeed, despite adversity?

Students often start out a bit scared of this question. They ask, “If I really tell them about my failures and obstacles, won’t they reject me?” No. In fact the opposite is true.

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How to Support Students with the Early FAFSA

[fa icon="calendar'] Oct 17, 2016 11:44:11 AM / by Will Geiger posted in High School and College

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fafsa-story2-financial-aid-blog-header-1180x420.jpgI opened up the thick envelope and was immediately confused. There were lots of columns, numbers, and jargon I was not totally familiar with. I felt like I was reading something in a completely different language. Instead, I was just reading the financial aid award from the graduate school I had just been accepted to. The application process seemed easy enough, but now I was trying to figure out the complex system known as financial aid.

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How You Learn: Answering Greenlight Scholars Essay 3

[fa icon="calendar'] Oct 13, 2016 3:11:44 PM / by Story2 posted in career, High School and College

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People learn many different things in many different ways. Describe a project or opportunity--in school or out--that challenged you, revealed something new or where you experienced failure. Reflect on what you learned, how you learned and how that learning influences your plans for college and the future.

This essay is an opportunity to explore how you work and learn. It’s a chance to reveal how you start with a goal, break it down into smaller parts, and take action to complete the larger project.  

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